ПРОВЕРЬТЕ ГРАММАТИКУ В ЭССЕ! *** People say that the advantages of living in a big city...

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ПРОВЕРЬТЕ ГРАММАТИКУ В ЭССЕ!
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People say that the advantages of living in a big city definitely outweigh the benefits of country life.
I'm one of those who prefer city. There's more diversity in leisure time: clubs, festivals, exhibitions, internet, ect. It is easier to make money than in the countryside. In the city of more people - more singles and more communication. It does not waste time growing food, less worries about the economy. Easier with hot water, toilets, electricity, heat, the ability to wash, to cook food. Simply create an opportunity for an appropriate education.
Life in the village has a whole other advantages. You can listen to loud music, burn fires, not afraid to disturb anyone. If serious attention to farming, not only can feed itself, but also to produce food, feed others. And getting to that income. The city has some tightness, which presses psychologically makes people angry. The village is more spacious and less stress.
It may, of course, something I have not taken into account, life is diverse, about everything at once can not remember, but until I inclined to think that my work is yet to be concentrated in the city. Or must be at least an opportunity to quickly get to the city.
In conclusion I want to say that no matter what you choose (town or village) it will be your own decision, based solely on your preferences and comfort.


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Хочу сказать, что очень хорошее эссе.
Довольно граммотно написано, только хочу сделать замечание: вы слишком часто употребляете "it" в начале предложения, замените любим другим словом.

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Спасибо огромное, но чем его к примеру можно заменить?

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К примеру, this.

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спасибо)

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Не за что )