Проверьте пожалуйста сочинение. Как грамматику и потсроение предложений, так и...

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Проверьте пожалуйста сочинение. Как грамматику и потсроение предложений, так и оформление.

Moscow

Russia

06\05\13

Dear Tom,

Thank you for your letter. I'm really sorry for not writing so long, I had problem at school. But now everything is OK.

In your letter you writing about young people, who want to not relying on their parents. So, many of my friends and Russia`s teens want to start new life after they finish school. In the other word, they dream about buying their own flats, but I haven't this kind of dream, I want to live together with my family while I get married. And in fact, it's very expensive to rent a house in my country.

I hear about your trip in Scotland, it's so interesting! Did you see a Lohness lake? That towns did you visit in Scotland? And who did travel with you?

Keep in touch.

Best wishes,

Julia

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                                                                                                                                          Moscow

                                                                                                                                            Russia

                                                                                                                                         06\05\13

Dear Tom,

Thank you for your letter. I'm really sorry for not writing so long, I had problem at school. But now everything is OK.

 In your letter you write about young people, who don't want to rely on their parents. So, many of my friends and Russian teens want to start new life after finishing of their schools. In the other words, they dream about buying their own flats, cars, beautiful clothes, but I don't haven such kind of dream, I want to live together with my family while I get married. And in fact, it's very expensive to rent a house in my country.

 I hear about your trip in Scotland, it's so interesting! Did you see Lohness lake? That towns did you visit in Scotland? And who did you travel with?

Keep in touch.

Best wishes,

Julia