Написал сочинение по англ. проверьте пожалуйста и исправьте. Мне сказали тип времена не...

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Написал сочинение по англ. проверьте пожалуйста и исправьте. Мне сказали тип времена не правильно стоят. Ну и много в общем ошибок.

Classmates, we agreed to go to the theatre. This was my first visit to the theatre. Had to go away, so I left early in the morning. On the way I thought looks like the theater building , what he is inside. When we were at the threshold of the theater, I saw that he was much prettier than I had imagined. Then we went inside, inside he was just amazing, the interior struck me. After some time the show started. They put me in a joyful mood , i am so involved in the action that i forget that i am watching a play. This view teaches us to find your way in life. it performance makes you laugh and happy. After the first trip to the theater I can say that I liked the theatre.


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То что I везде должна быть заглавная, знаю

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Classmates and i agreed to go to theatre. This was my first time visiting theatre. I had to go (время) so i left early in the morning. On the way to the theatre i was wondering how did theatre look like, what was inside of it. When we reached the threshold of the thatre, i realized that it looked prettier. Then we went inside of it, inside of the theatre was so amazing.They put me in a joyful mood, I was invlolved in the action so i forgot that i was watching a play. This view teaches us to find our way in life. The performance made me laugh. After the first visit to the theatre i can say that i like the thatre. 
думаю так будет лучше

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! we HAVE agreed
! лучше on MY way, а не on THE way
! ...i thought how did the theatre look like and what was it in the inside
! ...IT was much prettier
! лучше напиши IT was amazing there, when we went inside
! the show HAD started
! they HAD put me
! i was so...
! i forgot...
! ...to find your OWN PLACE in life
! itS performance, а вообще лучше THE performance

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