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The person that I admire the most is singer Olga Seryabkina. She was born on 12 th April 1985,in Moscow ,Russia. Olga is famous for his works of singer and writing songs for famous people ,including yourself.
Olga studied at the music school and dance school.After high school she enrolled in the University.
Some years later,she started the way in show business . Elena Temnikova led Olga in a musical group "Serebro". In 2015 Olga created a solo project "Holy Molly", then changed the title to "Molly",but she didn't leave the group. Today, Olga sings a songs and writes songs.
The reason I admire her is because she is clever and she doesn't care about the opinions of others and she does what she likes.

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The person that I admire the most is the singer Olga Seryabkina. She was born on 12th April 1985, in Moscow, Russia. Olga is famous for her works as a singer and for writing songs for famous people, including herself.
Olga swent to a music school and a dance school. After high school she entered a university.
Some years later, she started her carier in show business. Elena Temnikova brought Olga in a musical group "Serebro". In 2015 Olga created a solo project "Holy Molly", then she changed the title to "Molly", but she didn't leave the group. Today, Olga sings and writes songs.
I admire her because she is clever and she doesn't care about the opinions of others and she does what she likes.