Перевірте твір. І якщо є помилки напишіть де. Hi everybody. Today I want to tell about...

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Перевірте твір. І якщо є помилки напишіть де. Hi everybody. Today I want to tell about school of my dream. The school where I study is good. But several things could be changed . First of them is large library. And there are a lot of books in it. Second of them there are some room of rest at school. It will be nice If you can somewhere to rest at school. Third of them that`s equipped by equipment for study in every classroom. Example: laptop, smartboard, whiteboard or different poster on wall Fourth of them is choice 5 or more subjects which do you want to study. Example I don`t want study that subject which isn`t necessary or Last of them , I`d like go with my classmates to concert, exhibition or like it. I know all of them won`t be changed but at least one of them must be changed

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Hi everybody. Today i want to tell you about school of my dream. The school i study at is good. But several things could be changed.

First of them is a large library. There are a lot of books in it. Second of them are some (я бы лучше сказала break rooms) rooms of rest at school. It would be nice to have somewhere rest at school. Third of them are equipped classes for studying. For example: laptops, smartboards, whiteboards or different posters on the wall (дальше извини, чуть-чуть не поняла смысла). For example, if you don't want to study some subject, which you find unnecessary and not important for you, you can go with your classmates to the concert, exhibition and so on.

I know all of them may not be changed but in my opinion at least one of them must be.

Я добавила несколько изменений и еще нашла пару ошибок. Пересмотри

Изменения это чисто мое личное мнение, добавлять их не обязательно, но мне показалось, что так звучит лучше