1) After the game I heard THAT the crowd HAD BEEN over twenty thousands. I heard the crowd = слушал толпу (глагол восприятия)
2) We arrived ON the tenTH OF September (ON.September the tenth)
3) There were two hundred twenty (PEOPLE) IN ALL - либо перенести в начало
4) I got twenty-five OUT OF forty (POSSIBLE) in my test.
5) My birthday IS ON THE thirty FIRST OF August - см. №2.
6) My phone number is seven, TWO, ZERO (oh), three, six, ZERO, nine