ПРОШУ ПОМОГИТЕ ИСПРАВИТЬ ОШИБКИ ПОПРОШУ ПОМОГИТЕ ИСПРАВИТЬ ОШИБКИ ПО АНГЛИЙСКОМУ В...

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ПРОШУ ПОМОГИТЕ ИСПРАВИТЬ ОШИБКИ ПОПРОШУ ПОМОГИТЕ ИСПРАВИТЬ ОШИБКИ ПО АНГЛИЙСКОМУ В СОЧИНЕНИИ КОТОРОЕ Я СОСТАВИЛА !
( ЕСЛИ нужен перевод я кину в комментарий)
Has technology become such a big part of your life that existing without it now seems impossible ? In answering this question , many would answer yes and I fully agree with their opinion , because nowadays it is very important to be able to quickly contact the person .
I , in turn, can no longer live without the Internet. Computer work takes up most of my time. Thanks to the computer I can read books, get the necessary information for me , play games , also I can quickly connect with people and continue to communicate on the Internet.
For billions of people around the world, the Internet has become an essential component of their everyday
social and business lives. Internet greatly simplifies the lives of people . People are not necessarily going to the library for the book, because we can read it on the Internet. People are not necessarily to buy CDs with your favorite music, because we can also listen to it on the Internet .
Of course, working with a computer in many ways brings harm to the body . But technology become such a big part of your life that existing without it now seems impossible.

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А этот текст вы сами составляли?

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Киньте перевод) попробую помочь

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Я с английским дружу, я с детства к репетитора хожу)

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Did technology become such greater part of your life, that existing without him now seems impossible ? Answering this question, many would answer and I fully agree with their opinion, because it is very important presently, to have the opportunity quickly to contact with a man.I, in turn, no longer can live without the Internet. Work of computer occupies greater part of my time.Due to a computer I can read books, get necessary information for me, to play games, also I can quickly intermingle with people and continue to communicate in the Internet .For the milliards of people in the whole world, the Internet became an important component them every daysocial and business-lives. The internet simplifies life of people considerably. To the people not necessarily to go to the library after a book, because we can read her in the internet.To the people not necessarily to buy compact disks with favourite music, because we also can listen her in the internet.Certainly, working it in a great deal blights with a computer

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Вот как-то так, немного исправила, что нашла

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Ну я не до конца текст написала и исправила

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Не за что))