Пожалуйста, будьте добры, проверьте, правильно ли я составил сочинение по английскому...

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Пожалуйста, будьте добры, проверьте, правильно ли я составил сочинение по английскому языку.How I spent my summer holidays


Summer
- the holidays. My favourite season is summer. I love them
very much awaited. However, I spent them badly. This summer was
not remembered. All summer I stayed home. A couple of trips I went to the
village. But there I didn’t
like. There was no creature comforts. In the city I watched TV, read books. Sometimes, I played computer games
and walked. In the street I played football. Sometimes, my friends and I went to
the cinema. In the summer I read books which the teacher asked to read for
the summer. I read almost everything. Some of books were very large, but
some of them I liked. At the end of the summer, I really wanted to
go somewhere, but it didn't happen. Hopefully next summer I spend more
better.

Answer 1

 My favourite season is summer. I love it very much. However, I spent it badly. This summer was not memorable. All summer I stayed at home. Half of free time  I spent in the
village. But I didn’t like to be there . There was no creature comforts. In the city I watched TV, read books. Sometimes, I played computer games
and went for a walk. In the street I played football. Sometimes, my friends and I went to
the cinema. In the summer I read books which the teacher asked to read for
the summer. I read almost everything. Some of the books were very large, but
some of them I liked. At the end of the summer, I really wanted to
go somewhere, but it didn't happen. Hopefully next summer I will spend 
better.

Comments

Мне не хватает одного предложения. Ибо надо 19-19

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18-19

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По грамматике неверно.Можно сказать In summer I have holidays.Но это же очевидно.

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Спасибо

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Могу сконструировать этот текст на "более английском языке", но мне нужно хотя бы 10 минут

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Можете взять текст выше, он довольно неплох

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Спасибо, ой даже не знаю, что выбрать. Но что вам нужно?

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Мне ничего. Берите литературный текст из второго ответа.Он сложен литературным языком.

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Так будет лучше.А я просто исправила в вашем тексте ошибки.

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Да, пожалуй, нет. Учитель все таки знает, что я не очень. Да и учительница у нас новая. Так что я возьму исправленный вами текст. Спасибо

Answer 2

My favorite season is summer. Each year I wait for next summer. But unfortunately this summer wasn't as good as I expected. All days long I stayed at home. I was in the village a couple of times but I didn't enjoy it.There was no creature comforts. In the city I watched TV and  read books. Time by time, I played computer games and went out for a walk.In the street I played football.  my friends and I went tothe cinema a couple of times. In the summer I read books which the teacher asked us to read duringthe summer. I read almost everything. A lot of books were very large, but anyway  I loved some of them . At the end of the summer, I really wanted togo somewhere, but it didn't happen. Hopefully next summer will bebetter.

Comments

Спасибо

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Вам тоже большое спасибо.