Это пересказ по английскому языку. Проверьте пожалуйста грамматику. И прошу обратить...

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Это пересказ по английскому языку. Проверьте пожалуйста грамматику. И прошу обратить особое внимание на косвенную речь. Буду очень благодарна.
Fern said to her mother where her father went with that ax. The mother said he went to the hoghouse to kill is a runt pig. She said the pig would probably die anyway.
A girl of eight years was very seared and ran for his father. Fern said to not kill it, please.
Her father said she would have to control herself. But she continued to try to persuade him.
John Arable said she went back to the house and he would bring the runt when he came in.
Arable pig brought into the house, he was a newborn and white. The father said he than belongs to Fern. Girl saved this pig from premature death. She looked at him and said that he was perfect.

Answer 1

1) Fern said to her mother - не "said to", a "asked".
2) ax - такого слова нет, зато есть слово "axe".
3) to kill is a runt pig - "is" - лишнее.
4) A girl of eight years - правильнее будет написать "A eight years old girl".
5) seared - может быть "scared"?
6) ran for his father - "girl" - женский род, а потому не "his", a "her".
7) Fern said to not kill it, please - "please" - лишнее.
8) would have - правильно использовать "had" (без "would").
9) said she went back to the house - 1) "said that she went". 2) "back into the house".
10) and he would bring the runt - "and that he would...".
11) Arable pig brought into the house, he was a newborn and white - "When Arable brought the pig into the house, it was newborn and white".
12) The father said he than belongs to Fern - "The father said that it belongs to Fern".
13) Girl - "The girl".
14) She looked at him and said that he was perfect - "She looked at it and said that it was perfect".

Comments

Спасибо огромное! слово ax это тапор)

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Пожалуйста.

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Спасибо за оценку моего труда.