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I live in the city of Orsk. It settles down in the Orenburg area. Orsk borrows 80 seat on a population in Russia.
Orsk is considered the second in a commercial significance of the Orenburg area.
Pride of Orsk are Орский the state pedagogical college, as well as branch of the Orenburg state university and branch of the Orenburg state college of management as their pupils borrow prize-winning places in regional and All-Russia Olympiads.
One more pride of Orsk is the hockey command « Southern Urals Mountains » which spends house matches in a palace of sports "Anniversary"
As Orsk — one of large transport units of Russia, through it are carried out numerous passenger and freight traffic.
From the western side of Orsk spurs of the Ural mountains amazing with the beauty tower. In the given district the set of various mountain grasses and trees grows, it is possible to observe wild-growing tulips in the spring. Basically, in local seats weather pleases, as cloudless, in a year here it is more than sunny days.
Crisis in an ecological condition of an environment of Orsk directly depends on industrial pollution. Air in territory of Orsk is considered the most polluted in the Orenburg area.

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I live in the city of Orsk. It is in the Orenburg area. Orsk is the 80th in Russia according to its population .
Orsk is considered to be the second most important commercial centre in the Orenburg area.
The pride of Orsk is the Orsk State Pedagogical College, as well as the branch of the Orenburg State University and the branch of the Orenburg State College of Management, as their students take prize-winning places in regional and All-Russia Olympiads.
Another pride of Orsk is its ice-hockey team «South-Urals Mountains» which plays its home matches in the "Anniversary" sports palace.
As Orsk is one of the largest transport centres in Russia, a lot of passenger and freight traffic is carried out through it.
The mazing peaks of the Ural mountains can be seen fom the western spart of Orsk. In our district you can see a wide variety of mountain grasses and trees. In the spring you can find wild-growing tulips. The local weather is basically pleasing and cloudless. There are more sunny days in the year than cloudy ones.
The ecological condition of the Orsk environment is directly dependent on industrial pollution. The air of Orsk is consideredto the most polluted in the Orenburg area.